I thought it was interesting that you decided to take a different approach with your digital story, and used video combined with imagery. It made your video more personal, since we got to see the face and hear the voice of the person who created it. I think your dramatic question is the Dr. Who quote at the beginning. Your story of feeling stuck and then finding yourself is one that almost everyone can relate to in one way or another. Your video was a good length, it didn't feel too short or too long. I liked the sequence of images at the end that showed just some of the amazing sights our world has to offer. That tied in well with your video. The volume on your music could be a little lower. I had a hard time hearing you speaking at times due to the music. Other than that I think you did a nice job!
This is what I thought. See if it matches what you wanted your audience to know. Purpose: It is okay to change as a person as you go through your life. Dramatic Question: When did you change? Emotion: I think most people are interested in turning points in other people's lives because they have them in their own lives. Economy: Story is between 3 - 5 minutes Images: I liked the quote at the beginning of the story. I could think of several pictures that might have worked during your narration. At first I thought you had been to all these places at the end of your story, then I read your story board. So perhaps these are places you would like to go someday. Audio: I liked the music, but think it needs to be a little lower and your voice a little louder. Your voice inflection was good.
Brandon, I really enjoyed listening to you talk about your turning point! I like your choice to videotape yourself speaking. It feels like a confession. The music increased the emotional appeal! The live video of the Dr. Who quote was an excellent choice. It captures the attention of the viewer and creates a sci fi flavor!
My one suggestion for improvement is to change the images at the end to be images of actually places you have been or of things you have done since your turning point. These things do not have to be visiting the seven wonders of the world but little things...like a a restaurant in your hometown you have never been before....a street you've never been to before.....real things that you have actually done....The tension between these humble adventures alongside the dramatic grandiose music at the end will strengthen the emotional appeal and reinforce the idea that it's the little things in life that matter and small changes can make big difference in our lives. This digital story has potential to be very powerful in you make the ending honest and real.
Brandon, Your story is interesting, and something you can build a digital story around, and the music seems to be a good addition to the story, quiet and thought-provoking. The story you tell is well written. I think it might be more effective if you include some images with your story, some stills that we can contemplate while listening to the points you’re making, for example, a clock face when you speak about how we change through time, or an image of fireworks when you talk about the thoughts you were having the night your perspective changed. What you say is very important, too, so it might be helpful to have your voice stand out a bit more over the music. You have a good story to tell making an important point, and I think all of us have had times in our lives when we’ve changed, whether subtly or dramatically.
Your dramatic questions seems to be what are you going to do to change in response to the realization that everything else is always changing. The content of your narration was compelling; however, it was hard for me to hear your voice through the music, although the music was fitting. I agree with others that adding pics reflecting what you are talking about would help keep the audience engaged. Are the pics from around the world yours? If so, I think you should put that in credits. If not, think about putting some of your own pics reflecting what your experiences have been in there. Once the audience feels personal connection with you as a narrator, we want you to maintain that personal connection.
1. Purpose: The purpose of your story is people changing. 2. Dramatic Question: At the beginning there is a person that says “We All Change” 3. Emotion: People can relate about change. Everyone changes and a lot of people want to travel and your pictures will definitely capture that. 4. Economy: Your video is between 3-5 minutes. 5. Images: Your images are very nice. 6. Audio: The music is throughout your digital story and you have several different types that go along with your story. I like your story and the music that goes along with it. I think that you should include your own personal images. I liked that you were speaking and showed you doing it as well.
The best part about your story is your opening. I love the quote that you use from Doctor Who, and that you use a voice over of Matt Smith actually saying it. I also really like your approach to using video, as I haven't seen that used anywhere else.
Purpose: How people change, why people change, people changing, etc. Dramatic Question: When did we change? When was the turning point? Emotion: There's no doubt that this is full of emotion, as it's a personal story. Images: They're nice, and very pretty, but I think images with more of a personal appeal could have been a better choice. Audio: It's a little difficult to hear you sometimes, so maybe the music could be a little softer? You're always going to run into sound problems when recording video.
Brandon, Dude, I love your digital story!! Good for you! Go out there and love yourself, love others, and love nature!!! I think this is a great personal reflection, and I think many others could benefit from seeing this. If I had to make any changes, I would maybe tweak the levels on the music at first so we can hear your voice better and then maybe have a conclusion slide of some sort. But overall, I really liked your digital story!! Thanks, Michael Gallimore
The best thing about this story is how it chronicles your personal transformation. I think you covered everything very well. One thing you might consider is adding some visuals blended with your narration to support the imagery you are describing to help keep the audience engaged. Another good thing about this is how compelling you are as a storyteller.
The best thing about your story is that you talk about people changing while highlighting your own changes, giving it a personal effect. Another good thing about your story is the video imagery. One thing you may want to consider changing is the volume of the music.
I thought it was interesting that you decided to take a different approach with your digital story, and used video combined with imagery. It made your video more personal, since we got to see the face and hear the voice of the person who created it. I think your dramatic question is the Dr. Who quote at the beginning. Your story of feeling stuck and then finding yourself is one that almost everyone can relate to in one way or another. Your video was a good length, it didn't feel too short or too long. I liked the sequence of images at the end that showed just some of the amazing sights our world has to offer. That tied in well with your video. The volume on your music could be a little lower. I had a hard time hearing you speaking at times due to the music. Other than that I think you did a nice job!
ReplyDeleteThis is what I thought. See if it matches what you wanted your audience to know.
ReplyDeletePurpose: It is okay to change as a person as you go through your life.
Dramatic Question: When did you change?
Emotion: I think most people are interested in turning points in other people's lives because they have them in their own lives.
Economy: Story is between 3 - 5 minutes
Images: I liked the quote at the beginning of the story. I could think of several pictures that might have worked during your narration. At first I thought you had been to all these places at the end of your story, then I read your story board. So perhaps these are places you would like to go someday.
Audio: I liked the music, but think it needs to be a little lower and your voice a little louder. Your voice inflection was good.
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ReplyDeleteBrandon, I really enjoyed listening to you talk about your turning point! I like your choice to videotape yourself speaking. It feels like a confession. The music increased the emotional appeal! The live video of the Dr. Who quote was an excellent choice. It captures the attention of the viewer and creates a sci fi flavor!
ReplyDeleteMy one suggestion for improvement is to change the images at the end to be images of actually places you have been or of things you have done since your turning point. These things do not have to be visiting the seven wonders of the world but little things...like a a restaurant in your hometown you have never been before....a street you've never been to before.....real things that you have actually done....The tension between these humble adventures alongside the dramatic grandiose music at the end will strengthen the emotional appeal and reinforce the idea that it's the little things in life that matter and small changes can make big difference in our lives. This digital story has potential to be very powerful in you make the ending honest and real.
Brandon,
ReplyDeleteYour story is interesting, and something you can build a digital story around, and the music seems to be a good addition to the story, quiet and thought-provoking. The story you tell is well written. I think it might be more effective if you include some images with your story, some stills that we can contemplate while listening to the points you’re making, for example, a clock face when you speak about how we change through time, or an image of fireworks when you talk about the thoughts you were having the night your perspective changed. What you say is very important, too, so it might be helpful to have your voice stand out a bit more over the music. You have a good story to tell making an important point, and I think all of us have had times in our lives when we’ve changed, whether subtly or dramatically.
Your dramatic questions seems to be what are you going to do to change in response to the realization that everything else is always changing. The content of your narration was compelling; however, it was hard for me to hear your voice through the music, although the music was fitting. I agree with others that adding pics reflecting what you are talking about would help keep the audience engaged. Are the pics from around the world yours? If so, I think you should put that in credits. If not, think about putting some of your own pics reflecting what your experiences have been in there. Once the audience feels personal connection with you as a narrator, we want you to maintain that personal connection.
ReplyDelete1. Purpose: The purpose of your story is people changing.
ReplyDelete2. Dramatic Question: At the beginning there is a person that says “We All Change”
3. Emotion: People can relate about change. Everyone changes and a lot of people want to travel and your pictures will definitely capture that.
4. Economy: Your video is between 3-5 minutes.
5. Images: Your images are very nice.
6. Audio: The music is throughout your digital story and you have several different types that go along with your story.
I like your story and the music that goes along with it. I think that you should include your own personal images. I liked that you were speaking and showed you doing it as well.
The best part about your story is your opening. I love the quote that you use from Doctor Who, and that you use a voice over of Matt Smith actually saying it. I also really like your approach to using video, as I haven't seen that used anywhere else.
ReplyDeletePurpose: How people change, why people change, people changing, etc.
Dramatic Question: When did we change? When was the turning point?
Emotion: There's no doubt that this is full of emotion, as it's a personal story.
Images: They're nice, and very pretty, but I think images with more of a personal appeal could have been a better choice.
Audio: It's a little difficult to hear you sometimes, so maybe the music could be a little softer? You're always going to run into sound problems when recording video.
Brandon,
ReplyDeleteDude, I love your digital story!! Good for you! Go out there and love yourself, love others, and love nature!!! I think this is a great personal reflection, and I think many others could benefit from seeing this. If I had to make any changes, I would maybe tweak the levels on the music at first so we can hear your voice better and then maybe have a conclusion slide of some sort. But overall, I really liked your digital story!!
Thanks,
Michael Gallimore
The best thing about this story is how it chronicles your personal transformation.
ReplyDeleteI think you covered everything very well.
One thing you might consider is adding some visuals blended with your narration to support the imagery you are describing to help keep the audience engaged.
Another good thing about this is how compelling you are as a storyteller.
The best thing about your story is that you talk about people changing while highlighting your own changes, giving it a personal effect. Another good thing about your story is the video imagery. One thing you may want to consider changing is the volume of the music.
ReplyDelete